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Monday 30 March 2015

Malama Honua


Traveling from Hawaii comes the Hokule’a and the Hikianalia waka. They used traditional navigation methods. They are double hulled. They navigate by using the stars.


The two waka are going on a journey circumnavigating the globe. There voyage is called Malama Honua.


Yesterday there was a special event happening down at Point England beach. The two waka called Hokule’a and the Hikianalia waka came to New Zealand and landed on point england beach. That is why all the 12 Manaiakalani clusters of schools went down to the point.
Criteria for an Effective Paragraph
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⚈ Have at least 2-3 connected sentences.
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⚈ Have sentences that are effective that
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    b.  have juicy vocab e.g action/describing  words
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(Think of 1 or 2 things that you need to to focus on next time, to make sure your paragraphs are effective.)
Next time I  need to work on is grammatically correct

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